The profusion of gold hovered above the surroundings
As shards of shrapnel, exploded, sputtering out splintersIt’s laugh, cackled, sharp and proud
Lifeless limbs stretched out, blood thick like honey
Skin screeched out in despair
Begging for pain to stop, as it gets scorched by contact
Lungs wither from the inside, filling up with liquid
Soldiers drown, suffocating, eyes rolled back
Thought that war was an adventure
A journey, destiny, all craving for power
The truth was false, all lies
Gas hisses, watching men from afar,
As it guffaws, smirking, seeing them cry
This is awesome Alecs! You used lots of vivid language, and personification which was really effective. Maybe next time try and use more punctuation at the end of lines to make people pause intensely. Good work!!!
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