Saturday, 30 August 2014

The Weak

The Weak

 The tear tracks, down haggard faces
Drawn mouths, trembling hands
Is it so bad?
Understanding is a powerful thing.


 Guns, Death
Rivulets of blood and spit
Making tracks, forming streams in the mud.
Sacrifice is a necessary thing.


 How are we to defeat them,
Make them fall,
If we don't stumble too?
Estimation is a essential thing.

 Sitting whilst others must move,
Orders, lists, drinks
Office of Death
Initiative is an important thing.

  By Abby

5 comments:

  1. that is a very good poem Abby I like the way it really created a picture in your mind.

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  2. Great poem Abby. Nice imagery, and the way you used the commas to create a pause... AMAZING! :D

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  3. I love your use of powerful Adjectives and metaphors. It really creates a powerful image in your mind. Great Job!

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  4. Great imagery, I like how you structured your poem as well. Great work!!!

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  5. Every word feels like they're there for a purpose
    I like how you used powerful words and you made great imagery
    Awesome work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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